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deckhand.tex

@@ -74,12 +74,13 @@
         I can
             lead safe and fun dinghy sailing activities.
         %
-        With a
+        With
-            lifetime of sailing a 29ft Westerly Merlin on The Solent,
+            years of experience sailing a 29ft Westerly Merlin on The Solent,
+                one of the worlds busiest shipping areas,
         supported by
-            the Day Skipper and Yachtmaster Offshore Theory qualifications,
+            the Day Skipper and Yachtmaster Theory,
         I am
-            a useful deckhand,
+            a competent deckhand
         proficient with
             line handling,
             anchoring,
@@ -87,14 +88,12 @@
             passage,
             and pilotage.
         %
-        In addition, I can
+        I also have
-            support off-season maintenance,
+            experience with general maintenance,
         including
             antifouling,
             copper coating,
-            fibreglass repairs,
+            and fibreglass repairs.
-            %woodworking,
-            and general upkeep.
 
         % How am I interesting?
         %
@@ -128,8 +127,8 @@
         that will
             give hands-on industry experience,
         where I can
-            achieve the Yachtmaster Offshore qualification
+            achieve the Yachtmaster qualification
-            and a commercial certification.
+            on track to a commercial certification.
     }
 
     \ResumeSection{Skills}